“New Learning Instrument for classes” by : Dian Firmansyah

Do you know a class? Have you ever heard this word before? What is the
meaning? I’m sure that majority people will say that a class is a room
of students to study in school and campus. Is it Right? I think yes
because in the very past event I also had those opinion.

Based on KBBI, class is level; room as studying place in school;
society group based on education level, income, power, etc; group,
collection(based on any equivalent of characteristic); Bio
classification in biological after division and before natoin. 

In my point of view, a class is a place for students to gather, studying,
and learning any lesson. The lesson can be from lecturers or any
reference like internet and book. Actually, lesson must be suitable
with the curiculum. So, classmeets need something to make the learning
procces succesfull. That needed can be devided into 2, there are
something real and something abstract. For abstract thing needed in a
class is like good personality and excellent attitude. We can mention
that patient, care with other, respect, friendly, diligent, smiling,
competitive, polite, honest, and many other belongs to good
personality and excellent attitude. I will talk over some of them
only. The first one is patient. Do you know the reason of including
patient to learning instrument needed in class? Patient needed in
every part life, so learning in class include it. The next one is
polite. Every classmeets must be polite to other. For example, one
student have polite attitude, when he/she need help, many classmeets
offer help to him/his. But if one student have impolite attitude, when
he/she need help, little classmeets offer help.

The next thing or instrument needed in a class is real thing, such as
good room, complete reference, complete media, etc. Good room is one
of instrument needed in a class. Why? Because place for someone
learning has effects of understanding lessons intensity. For example,
the lighting in room, has effect to students who have eyes diseases
like myopic, etc. The next one is complete reference. Do you know why?
Cause reference can increase the understanding intensity someone from
lessons. For example, someone named “A” who hasn’t book reference with
someone named “B” who has book reference. I’m sure that “A”  can’t
understand the lesson completely, while “B” can understand all side of
lesson clearly.

After discuss all about what needed in class, we can get a conclusion
about new instrument that needed. In my point of view that problem,
new learning instrument needed in class is complete the abstract and
real equipment, like what I has mentioned above. So after that, we can
study and learn in enjoying class with full of understanding lessons.
And then on the next exam, majority clasmeets get well result. Not
only those, from doing that students especially moslem like me, can
get many barokah, safety, and ridho from God, Allah SWT. Continue if
looking future,n it is very useful for us working world, because we
have those attitude correctly.

 Review :

- First and foremost, the formating here is really bad! There are no spaces between the paragraph and the indent doesn't even added (I supposed you type it on Phone?). Next time, try to send your email to your own address to see how it will looks like in the blog.

- Despite the bad formating, the grammar and tenses used in this Essay is rather good. I almost find no major mistake to point other than the word choices.

- The word "Do you know..." is not a good way to start an Essay. Instead, directly define what you are asking "Class is a ...." like in your second paragraph.

- Avoid using the word "things" try the word "Instrument".