New Equipments for Classes by : Faiq Najib Al-Aziz

Classes are the container of lectures in college life. The classes users are not only us but also the lecturers. Some classes are meant to be fun to stay in by put the souls into it. Not only our souls but also the lecturers’ souls. So the classes become more comforable to stay in and we can stay a little longer. But there are some factors that cause we don’t comfort to stay in classes. However the weather in outside worse than in inside. So I give suggestions about what are the equipments we need for our classes.

First, according to our problem is comfort. We are become uncomfortable because of the weather. The weather in outside is hot. So the weather inside or in classes must be more cold. As we know, the weather of Surabaya is hot as hell. I say that because I've been live here since 1 year old. It is no doubt why malls around Surabaya are packed with people, since those places are less hot compared to the city itself. Thus what we need here is air conditioner. The air conditioners are put in each classes. I knew that the current air conditioner aren't turn on every time to thrift the electricity cost. We need it because now is summer and its occupant is many, so it can be wisely if the air conditioner keep turn on until the classes are over. Why? I think the current air conditioner are not appropriate with the current occupant. I did’t say that the college management were not calculate the occupant. But I think the current air conditioner are istalled in long time ago. What I want to say is, the current air conditioner is can’t make the classes temperature more cold because miscalculated between the strength of air conditioner and the current occupant of classes. The college management should change the current air conditioner with the new one. I think it can be realization slowly start from next semester.

Second, distraction will come in any shape or form. Including another students. No, I didn't say our classmates are total distraction, what I objected here are people outside our class. As we know, our classes are installed the windows, either in D4 (the newer) building or D3 (the older) building. What I want to say is, it is sometimes we tend to look outside from the class instead of the lecturer in front of us. Why? Simple, it is more fun to observe what is happening out there and sometimes, if we lucky enough, something funny will happen. What I want to say is, distraction will come out from nowhere, to prevent that we need curtains, window curtains. It will help us to watch what is written and happening in front of the class. Observing people is something you can do after the class and I know it is a fun thing to do, because sometimes I do that too.

My coclusion is I think the college management should read or hear our issues. So they can consider the wise decision. I and the other students here realize that actually these are our dreams which are cannot be accomplished for now because some issues, such as money issues. There’s nothing wrong in dreaming, especially dreaming about the dream class and all. But don't just demand our rights for the dream class but also do our liability, which is to learn. Thus, stay positive and energetic.

Name   : Faiq Najib Al-Aziz

Class    : D3 Telecommunication Engineering - B

Year     : 1

Review :
- Paragraph One Sentence four. A more suitable word for this one is "there are some factors that cause discomfort to stay in classes". You don't have to use "we" for his sentence because readers will know who feels unconfortable, even without telling.
- Paragraph Two, Second sentence. Don't forget to add v-ing after tobe, except if you are using passive.
- Paragraph Two, Third sentence. The word "outside" has already shown where the event happened.
- This is a rather fun Essay to read. but, maybe you should reduce using "Why?" too often.
- Maybe my only complain is at second paragraph. it's too dense! you should be able to split it into two Paragraph.